Comments of chapter undefined of HP: Magic Punk
HP: Magic Punk
kamidemond
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He should have killed Nick, you are just prolonging the unnecessary drama between them. This Arc could be about self reflection and realisation that sometimes there is no choice but to kill you enemy. Unfortunately you are making some ridiculous drama about Nick being Harry which he is irrelevant in this story. The fact that Hermione came to stop the fight was such a disappointment. I am starting to believe that I will soon drop this story. Eh...
kamidemond:Don't worry, in my mind this was important for Orion's character to grow. Its just the end of 2nd year and thats it, there is much more to the story.
You're not a bad author, so you made bad choices, for the majority of readers, you could maybe do a rewrite of the fanfic, it has potential, so remove the joke about Merlin's nerf or put the joke and the explanation in the same chapter, give a slightly more serious personality (not that much, but enough to make a difference in the fights) for MC, after all, he's already in the 2nd year of the film and change the nick's plot to something different, or not involve Hermione or any character with divergence from memory that he has a good or affectionate relationship with the MC, and if he wanted to use the same plot, Nick and Hermione could have presented them much later on where Hermione and the MC's relationship is more robust and they are more mature and doesn't have all this drama is necessarily between friends, because of a memory of an alternative lookalike (not even from the future, but from an alternative world), it is my opiniões.
