Comments of chapter undefined of Flashy Adventurer System : Show Off to Get Stronger!

Overall a solid story. The only issue here is your telling, and not showing. Linger on the scenes more. Its ok to tell when its progresses the scene, but not when it comes to character, emotion, senses and world building etc..

The chapter was lacking a lot of world building. It doesn't linger enough on anything that has been presented for me to care. The fight against the wolf could have been tense but it was just glossed over that I'm doubting his fighting abilities. I hope there's a logical reason for their house being taken away from them.

Nice chapter... It's easy to read and follow up to what's happening... Also, the dialogues / scenes are intriguing to read.

what an interesting start, seems promising 😘

Off to a nice start!

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