Comments of chapter undefined of Hypnosis: Whispers of Power and Deceit
Hypnosis: Whispers of Power and Deceit
Author_1188
Chapter comments5
the book has been great till now , I don't have much of a problem with how it's going now , but if I were to add he should add more interesting suggestions during the hypnosis not the same thing everytime , and just like tge guy above if others are getting powers it should not appear as if he is weak , it would be great if he were to get more powers the more he uses his hypnosis ability .
Loving the story! Just make sure you're not creating a completely detached sociopath ;). He doesn't have to love them all just don't ruin their lives by making them his literal "dog" or smth.As for others with powers, if you decide to go this route make it so the Mc is not some lame weak man scheming in the shadows. Make him use his powers on himself to, for instance, improve his physicality, willpower, etc.Btw I would love to see some common sense overrides. For example making a girl think it's normal for him to be named as long as he has his socks on. Or that it's normal for a girl to help him out when he needs to pee and there's no toilet near them, they'll let him relieve himself in their backdoor.Anyways these are just some suggestions, make sure you're writing a story you yourself like. Can't wait for the next chapter.
