Comments of chapter undefined of Future General Jin, Your Evil Sister-in-law Keeps Doting On You

The most obvious problem is the switch in perspective from first person to third person and then in the next chapter it looks like first person again. The other problems are the random switching of tenses between past and present (it's not quite consistent), the weird capitalizations vs non-capitalisation and occasional wrong word. But the main thing is that it is still readable. The story isn't bad so far, but changing of perspectives is really a big turn off.