Anaesthetic_Dawn
I'm gonna keep it real. It wasn't really a good start. The story starts with a lackluster line. You need something to hook the audience and honestly it's very pretentious. The descriptions, to MC's sad pessimistic exposition, to the lame one sided love scenario and the one dimensional bully. The idea is nothing special but it's not bad either, it's the execution where the flaw lies. I'm giving out my honest thoughts not hate, if you do end up re-writing the first chapter in the future please keep these flaw in mind, but I'm gonna keep reading see if it improves