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Comments of chapter undefined of All Bark (Twilight fic)

Lycarus
LycarusLv2Lycarus

good chapter... but you should have made a better introduction, it was very confusing and this can put readers off, as no one knows anything about what is happening, his conversation with his brother was also very messy, but other than that, thanks for the chapter.

Lycarus
LycarusLv2Lycarus

you should also try to improve the synopsis, as it did not prepare the reader for this beginning... as I said in the other comment, everything was confusing, try to make a better synopsis, which prepares the reader for the book, as the current synopsis does not says nothing

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AbandonedToGodhood
AbandonedToGodhoodLv13AbandonedToGodhood

No synopsis lol

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Schmorf
SchmorfLv4Schmorf

First And seems like a good obe hope it will be continued