Shadow_Magus
Great work, author, but I want to alert you to some important things that will contribute to transforming your work from an ordinary work to a distinguished work. 1 Try to avoid implicating the hero with Adam, Amun, Belize Zoroaster, the goddess of perpetual night, or any other god. Try to make the hero hidden from the sight of these gods and Adam for as long a period as possible. 2 You have a full year before Klein is reborn. Try to take advantage of this year in 3 important things: 1 - Sequence. Try to make the hero advance and reach Sequence 7. Don't forget that you have 3 complete tracks. You can have the hero choose the simplest path out of these three paths and strive to reach Sequence 7 if he can, or at least try to reach Sequence 8. //.. 2 Do not forget to make the hero establish a political, personal, and financial relationship with some people, for example (Earl Hall - Duke Negan) - Do not forget (as the hero progresses on his way, the amount of resources required for the potion will increase, in addition to that it will There is a significant increase in the money used to search for these materials. For this reason, the hero must have some relationships or investments that benefit him economically and politically, or we may later witness the same problem as Klein with money đ 3. Don't forget, the hero must leave the moment Klein is born for a week or More, the reason is very simple, don't forget, author, that when Klein is born for the second time, he will be under the protection and supervision of the Night Gods and some other gods for a period of time, and the hero must leave Tenjin City during that period so as not to be discovered by all the gods... Don't make the hero type cliche. For example, the hero should not trust anyone in a rash manner and should calm down a little. The same applies to the gods. We must not forget that the four most intelligent and malicious gods are as follows: 1 Goddess of Perpetual Night / Angel of Imagination (Adam) / Goddess of Mother Earth (Lilith) God of Wisdom and Knowledge (Herabergine) The hero must beware of these people 4