Comments of chapter undefined of Streamer in the Omniverse
Streamer in the Omniverse
Calleum_Artori
Chapter comments35
Till now it is a good story but the romance with Saya irked me, it just feels like your average teenage romance with Saya blushing over everything and mc calling her little tiger felt so cringe. And other problem I guess I have is author wasted Saeko potential as a character. Cuz of romance with Saya author didn't use Saeko potential and character well and in the end making her some shadow to Saya which seems forced and wasteful. I think author should focus on Stream and mc interacting with his viewers more and if you want to show romance, make fmc more than just some stereotypical heroine. Honestly the romance with Saya had no depth and feels like it happened just cuz author wanted it (maybe cuz of author love for tsundere which I undestand). Instead DS friendship with both male characters have more depth. That's my criticism till now but still I am enjoying the story.
Yeah I understand, that's why I wanted to show some positive criticism so that you can improve on what I think can be done differently. I mostly don't comment much about criticism as I leave the fanfic which I don't like. But your fanfic is honestly one of the best I read here. And that's why I gave my opinion so that you can improve as you keep on writing. It's been a long time since I read about a mc who isn't a murder hobo or a kind and forgiving good guy (honestly I am also tired of forgiving mc after just finishing Trails of Cold Steel 3). Also one of the reasons why I like your fanfic is cuz you added Rin and like myself you also seems to be a great Fate series and Rin admirer. So cheers to that too and just keep on pumping those chapters.
Calleum_Artori:Actually, there's a deeper reason why Devas had a quick romance with Saya. I'll explain that in a few more recent chapters that I'll release, it wasn't just, "Because I wanted to" (Even though there's a part of that). As for Saeko, I ended up sidelining her because frankly, I was (and am) a novice writer. I'm not afraid to admit that I made many mistakes while writing (and still do), I try to correct them or keep them to a minimum. This is my first story, I'm trying to create something that's cool, of course, there are many things I wish I could have done differently or changed, but what's done is done.
