Depraved_Chap
I dont understand your point in showing those guys POV It is well wrighten but i realy would like more Focus on the MC and one or another POV to show something realated to the MC you showed us that you dont give a F for the Canon at least most parte of iti would like to have less POV chance in the midle of a good scene or before you finish It onde and for ALL before changing but this is my personal taste só fell free to keep what you think is the best for your novel