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the constant jumping around from 1st to 3rd person isn't something someone who graduated 9th grade should do. Stick to a perspective.
I love the premise of the story but really the mc is not for me. Only personal taste you wrote a solid story and will have a ton of readers. I sincerely wish you luck with your work you deserve it .
Thanks for the Chapter!
A palavra determinação se repete varias vezes , ela perdi o pesso e impacto com essa repetições
