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Comments of chapter undefined of The Archmage of Sin

ismaelmaster10
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Yorbin
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Not bad for your first scene of this type, but a lot could be improved. Mainly, the descriptions of the physical interactions between the two. Also, I don't know if this was intentional, but you wrote it as if she wasn't enjoying it at all, which at least for me, is a bit of a turn-off.

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HappyKing
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use her in this outfit

Thisascam
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TrueVoid45
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thanks for the chapter