Comments of chapter undefined of Destiny Forgers

Don't they know one shouldn't harm children.... pathetic fools

Wow! I had goosebumps and teary eyes, I'm sensitive when it comes to mothers and their children perishing, I'm thankful not to know how they passed or details on that. But it definitely got me hooked!

It's a good Opening.While it's only my preference, if you want to make a tragic BUT very sad scene at the same time, try to make the delivery to that point is longer. In this case, tricking the readers that these people are somehow important to the story, just to kill them in the end. But like I said, it's only personal preference. You could ignore it. Or if you like it, you can take it as reference.

Author, I know it's your work but please I think it would be better if you write in past tense, like 'she replied' instead of 'she reply' 'she asked' instead of 'She asked'

I liked it, especially that you write the brutal scenes without censoring anything. One thing that feels strange to me is reading something in present tense, but it's just a matter of getting used to it

It seems you wrote with PoV3, is it? Good opening, though 👍

wow this has to be one of the best written works I've read on Webnovel. This was an incredibly well-written and emotional chapter, I can't wait to finish this

Dear readers! I have updated my chapter 1 again and this time I have wrote it in past tense. Thanks everyone for reminding me to write my story in past tense.