Comments of chapter undefined of Heights of Victory

Just finished reading the chapter. I'd recommend going through the chapter and having a detailed look through all your grammar.Story wise, it's interesting and a good start. I liked a lot of the introspection and it was definitely on the right track. There are some areas that you need to improve though, like being more confident in your writing. 'I think they are making fun of me' is very different from 'They are making fun of me'.

This is interesting, can't wait for the next chapter