Comments of chapter undefined of Snakes and Ladders (A Hollywood SI/OC)
Snakes and Ladders (A Hollywood SI/OC)
Archonstine
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Hi man. Honest comment, I kinda feel you make a lot of commentaries made by ricky about the future? I personally think that it's not necessary. I mean, I get how you want to share what Ricky aims to do and what he wants to hapoen, but I think you don't necessarily need to make a monologue for that to happen. Instead, you can embedd it into the story as the plot progresses. Instead of dumping it in one go, and I can feel that there's really no much progress on this chapter from the last chapter. Just a suggestion tho, đ.
I can see that. But here's the thing man, you don't need to explicitly tell us. You can just show it to us instead. Also, that also helps with building the excitement for us. Just a comment tho, not that it's bad. Just felt unnecessary.
Archonstine:Honestly, I just wanted to give some exposition on the marketing that Ricky will do and introduce Comic-Con.
Usually I criticize this kind of story for being too repetitive - the op releases a new story everyone is amazed at his talent - but in your story we don't feel the protagonist's accomplishments, we don't learn that he released successful books and comics with just sentences. We don't feel involved. Thanks for the chapter.
