Dashlin_King
So, after reading all the chaps. There are small mistakes with he/her that may be cofusing. Im not a native English speaker so its hard to judge grammar. The way he thinks is really to my taste. Even tho he is clearly into girls he wants that divine yin pshysique for himself and dont care how to get it. Thats a good mindset for an evil mc. I dont have a problem with it at all, but it would be better for you to give some kind of information, when the mc first see that girl ( I cant call her dude, sry its kinda weird knowing she will change quick hehe). Since he knows about that that physique, make a note that her soul/mind was always female, and its just how this physique manifests and needs strong feelings to awaken. I know lots of people on this side who will call this ya oi, trust me, im a long time harem reader and know my fellow daoists. That small change will help a lot and you wont get mean comments. She is even thinking like a girl so there is no need to change the rest. Mc calls her Brother cos everyone do that from her birth, even tho she feels like girl all the time. Those additional info will help other readers to self insert themselfs into mc, lets be honest who wants to flirt with a dude haha. And it will feel.better after the change. I have very high hopes for this book, so I wanted to share some of my opinions. Most people reading harems see themselfs as mc (mee to) and if the feeling is weird, there is a problem. I have the same with yuri, I dont like it in harems. It feels like partner sharing, so I dont read stuff like that. You just gained a new Reader bro. I like what I see. Think about making a dis.cord, wn cens ors some words and its better for communication with your community. I will write my idea for dual cultivation in alux chapters.