NunuXD
Don't get me wrong I love the commentary bbut I need to tell you this early on but over half your chapters seems to be of them it is slowing the progress of the story. Right now it is fine but over time this will become very annoying as the readers will lose interest listening to people reacting to every single chapter/game like you are doing now. The story needs to progress a bit faster. I am just stating as I seen other novels do this and quickly the hype and love forr t fell down that many dropped them because you have a full chapter or almost full chapter of just reactions.