shounengirl
The plotline of the novel is good, and I as a veteran Webnovel reader find much potential to be unearthed. One thing I would like to suggest is the tone of dialogues for different characters, it feels as though same character is speaking for others as well. It might be subconscious action, but I think someone would find it uncomfortable while reading because I surely do. However, if you work on it, it might get better with time. Good luck for your future endeavors.
shounengirl:Hello!! Of course not!! I highly appreciated your comment 🥰🥰 It makes me happy that someone is reading my work. I will try my best to improve my work with your suggestion. I don't mind comments like this, its not demeaning, it helps me to improve and appreciate my work! ARIGATO 🙏❤