Comments of chapter undefined of Learning the art of seduction in kinder garden.

Good luck with the novel. Feedback: Be careful with grammar, there's a few decapitalized 'I's in there and some questionable grammar around dialogue tags. Maybe don't have these long, slightly didactic monologue chapters at the start. The guy's manifesto-lite takes up a large part of the chapter, plus this opening is slowish and lacks a clear hook. It might be useful to set the scene more clearly, the idea of beginning with a criminal is an interesting take on an RI-like opening, but it might help readers get a hang of this earlier by clearly delineating the situation with the man being a criminal facing execution. Also, speaking of 'all human cruelty' in this way comes across as a bit sweeping and not necessarily that vivid, there's not that much by way of specific detail that's particularly gripping or exciting here. In RI, I don't think that there was that much mystery about what was happening, the beginning made it quite clear what kind of immediate predicament Fang Yuan was in. Further, RI was blatantly drawing on the tropes of the genre and playing with them, portraying FY as the great villain who is being defeated, whereas I'm not sure that this novel is drawing on a specific archetype clearly and therefore its opening is much less evocative - especially given the lack of detail. This opening also doesn't have as much conflict as the RI opening, so there's less to keep WN readers