Comments of chapter undefined of Walking with Celestials

I liked the setup of the story and the mysteries involving Hirow. I'm definitely curious about how everything will turn out. One thing I will note is that the chapter needs a bit more editing, whether it be in sentence structure or grammar. I'm not sure I really relate to Hirow either, since I don't know much about him beyond the little introductions included. I think a bit more characterization and world development (without being too info-dumpy!) would be a good direction. Overall, I like the potential!

Your writing is very poetic, even when it's not an actual poem. It's very descriptive in terms of the environment, so I can imagine the scenes more vividly. Great job!

i just love the way you write, it's calming to read and I can easily picture what's going on thanks to the descriptions. I like how you ended the chapter too

that was intrigued prologue I gotta say, a good job!