Comments of chapter undefined of Blood And Iron (ASOIAF/GoT)
Blood And Iron (ASOIAF/GoT)
Chill_ean_GUY
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This is great, but I can't help but wonder. Wouldn't it have been more promising for the MC to have been transported at least a decade or two back before cannon even began? This way the alternate-history Prussians would have a foundation of strength. Not to mention also give the MC time to plan against all sorts of cannon disasters that are about to come to Westeros.
minimal punctuation mishaps, you have improved astronomically. I would like to tell you to not take my criticism to heart, as it may sound rude but I only do this because I love this setting and you are doing good work, which I want to see be better and nothing else. One thing I might suggest shortening your paragraphs, as while one may forget while writing about the length of each paragraph, the readers here are all of short attention spans, skipping the paragraphs they may think to be a bother to read. This might make your story more enticing. Also, the basics of the basics to post the chapter at 9:30 pm IST, that's when the power stones reset so you might want to convert this time to your time zone and post at this time, getting more readers who had not given off their Powerstone to some other story. There are some grammar mistakes such as the first letter and nouns not being capitalized, but I am sure you would improve as you go forward with the story With this, I am partying my power stone, which was meant to be for my Novel to you as you deserve this for today, Nice work.
