Comments of chapter undefined of Gravity overlord

if you going the multiple lead route you will fail since it's tiring and exhausting to your ideas and potential 3 chapter all focust of the Phoenix gir the twins and all was unnecessary focus on your Mc build him first before introducing ather characters back stories coz now we don't know if these people will be significant to the story or are just extras it's to early to do what your doing

Now this is getting annoying.