Satan03
I like the storyline, the character depth, and the designs so far. Maybe it's just me, but I prefer paragraphs in stories like these to have more complex and descriptive sentences for a wider variation, and also more detailed vocabulary. Like instead of, 'my mother crying while holding me' you could say, 'my mother's rigid breath as she sobbed, her trembling arms wrapped gently around me'. Idk, this is just my opinion, I've never tried posting web novels so idk if this would take up too much time or smthn đ