Lee_Kah
The quote in proper English is "Only in death does duty end." I'd use a paragraph comment, but ever since they updated the mobile app UI, I haven't been able to make them on my phone. Otherwise, besides that great job, the story is really good, and honestly, the naysayers can find something else to read if they don't like it instead of being a bunch of nagging Nancy's and saying how much they don't like the story without giving any constructive criticism as to why they don't like it. And even then, it's you, the "author's" story, not the "readers" story. You shouldn't have to cater to our whims if you don't want to, and if someone doesn't like what you wrote, they can just stop reading and find a different story to read.