Comments of chapter undefined of Psionic (Marvel)
Psionic (Marvel)
Moziel
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author youve said that the reason we're dragging all this out is for the new mutants to overcome their fears and all that nonsense but can you establish why we would even remotely care about them or their personal development? Andrew doesn't seem to be particularly invested in them friendship or relationship wise, their powers are okay but nothing amazing in marvel land and they all seems like way too much of a hassle to make decent subordinates. if he was just watching on the sidelines doing absolutely nothing or just laughing at them I'd find that far more believable then him taking the time to effectively help them. Really just feels like you're rehashing the movie because it's pre-established? you can say he's doing it to seem like a smaller threat to "Essex" but you also need to say that clearly everytime he sandbags this hard.
i really dislike the explitives: BOOM POW FOOTSTEP5x that belongs in a comic not a story. the movie btw? it sucked, this doctor might have cool shields but she is not omniscent in putting them up against teleporting soulsword girl. so why are they so afraid of her? as for the bear.... its a psionic construct not an actual demon so where does this strength come from.
