Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn as a vehicon with a system[ Process of re-writing ]

Hmm, I read this and still found many mistakes. Here are some --1. Again, the characters are way too human-like. You need to make robots like robots, pieces of walking metal.(But then this could be contradictory to the "emotions" shown by Optimus in the movies) and if you were to add emotions to the robots, make it more....robot-y? If you want to know what I meant by robot-y, I'm taking reference to the movies. 2. Your timeline in this seemed confusing to me. I have no idea what's happening and when and how. For a reader, you should make it extremely, extremely clear about all these details, because remember, they aren't reading the novel in the way you would read and imagine it.3. The details. For example, in this chapter you introduced the concept of currency. Well , instead of just writing "paid me", explain it like - "he paid me and at the corner of my vision, I saw the icon of [currency name(better to keep one)] and the amount next to it. Satisfied, (one person, could be you or someone else) left." You get what I'm trying to say?😅😅And after writing each chapter, re-read your written chapter 2 or 3 times before publishing it. This allowed me to get a perspective of a reader and to rectify any mistakes I made in my novel. Most important is, let your creativity flow, write it down, let the world know it, and enjoy making new worlds of your imagination. 😁😁Btw, I'm curious, if you don't mind me asking, are you in school, college, job, or a retired person? 😅😅 I keep thinking abt my readers because it's basically a random person's(me) book being read by random people, and I'm kind of a curious about my readers sometime😅