Comments of chapter undefined of Villain: Destiny Transfer System

hi just wanted to ramble some words first of all i wanted to say that as a new writer you did good maybe but I want to point out some mistakes 1 in 1st chapter you started with lame Chinese style writing with no introduction of world or same basic concepts or some interaction when introduction system it just came like apple falling on neuton* no explanation you should have written that he got that system from starting but it took time to start functioning and collecting energy second many people read people Chinese or cultivation novel for time pass and remembering some name is very bad when there is many caracter interaction you should have chosen English or simple name 3rd something in starting you changed perspective from 3 to 1st person which make it anoying just a suggestion and a guy on internet ramblings about your story