Comments of chapter undefined of Time For Vengeance

If it's okay with you. I would like to advise you to make slight additions to your writing style—not changes but additions, like making it a little more descriptive. And I do hope that you use a grammar-checking tool that is free, like Quillbot. It will help you make your sentence more understandable to your reader. I hope that you edit these chapter so that I can reread them and then I will leave my review.

It's exactly the same as the first chapter. What's the point you want to talk through this conversation? What is the problem here? And why should the reader proceed to next chapter?

the power of your story lies in your first chapters, so edit through them nicely, use Quillbot ,and have your grammar checked. don't feel stressed , improve your chapters so we can enjoy them together. my surgetion though.

here's the thumbs up 👍

Always great

Ok, I think you should be more descriptive, if you want to approach a chat story style, may be writing it like a conversation will be better. Just my thought, story is fine

Nice going

The length is fine.

I giggled at this chapter. Everyone's interactions were so cute.