Comments of chapter undefined of Release That Succubus
Release That Succubus
different_minds
Chapter comments5
Look man I really enjoy your story but it is really tiresome that all the arcs initiate the same way. At the start it was that Luna was in trouble, then it was Diana on Elizabeth city, then Luna again, then Clara, then Violet, then Diana, now Christina. Like, Isn't there other way to initiate a conflict? It just gets so tiresome that one of the girls gets in trouble/kidnapped/blackmailed and then Zach has to save her by defeating the family that opposes to him on that moment. I like the setting and all and I was really hoping that the fight against the royals would be more of politics and economics but now the conflict will be, once again, to save one of the girls... It just got old really quick.
It won't happen again. The story will set off at a whole new pace and course. I swear it's going to be epic because I really put a lot of effort into it. I've written a lot of novels, but this one is completely different. I'm writing this with my soul.
theWeevill:Also it doesn't help that every time that Zach saves one of them he thinks "I have to ensure that this doesn't happen again!" and then it does happen again, it makes him look so uncapable of protecting those that he loves.