Comments of chapter undefined of Dungeon Master Online

Welcome back I didn’t have anything to proofread for sometimes so expect me to be extra thorough for your next chapters 😈 Good chapters most mistake are due to inattention this time 😡 if you want I can give you my discord to read chapter before you upload so that no p[arty or minldlessy happen again 😂 Good progression overall keep it up some tips and advice from this chapter observations (that might be wrong) : You tend to add up a lot after verbs even when it’s not necessary Still some difficulty to separate sentences and ideas per moment (Giony paragrah about lesser dragonling is such an exemple) Repetition have a long life (unfortunately) they are less present than before but still some try to avoid using However too much and While too (I thinks that’s the two repetition I saw in this chapter) Have a nice day (or night) 😊