Comments of chapter undefined of System: Supreme NPC
System: Supreme NPC
Maketh07
Chapter comments23
This book in my opinion has a lot of potential. The idea is most definitely. However two problems exist atm that stand out the most to me. 1. The constant switching between present and past tense at inappropriate times. This is resulting in the idea you are setting out failing to hit its target. Also makes it harder to read. 2. As someone said before me, the potential for the story based on the background info you just gave is there. However it needs more, or so it seems. Perhaps fixing problem one would result in problem two being resolved.
Por alguna razón, en este tipo de historias siento que le hacen mucho KOI a Corea y Japón. No lo sé, es que siempre dicen, Japón es la mera riata porque hizo esto, Corea es bien chingón porque creo aquello.Todo el rato haciendo KOI.Fuera de eso es una explicación interesante, quiza un poco larga y que se pudo haber explicado en otro capítulo, pero un gran contexto.Todavia no leo la historia pero por lo que han mostrado tengo esperanza que sea una buena historia ☝️🤓 .Posdata: MUCHO TEXTO.