Hile_Lawrence
This is not bad. The story has interesting elements and powerful emotions. However, Ilska changes from a wild child to a scholar unexpectedly in her way of speaking about revenge. Arthur becomes hyper loyal to Waldo in the matter of a hour or 2 for the dungeon raid. The royal soldiers power level is all over the place, mithril-rank, cannon-fodder, whatever to serve to underline either danger to MC or overpoweredness of another character. Ilska is overpowered in physical ability, has powerful mana explosion and maybe learn super fast (if we trust her quich change of langage), then how could you explain that they did not conquer the whole world and were instead wiped out.