Comments of chapter undefined of Leveling Up with My Adorable Monster Girl Harem!
Leveling Up with My Adorable Monster Girl Harem!
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A lot of things dont make sense or dont add up or not explained properly which makes one feel confused. There is a heavy lack of world background and the character seems to be forced. For example, why the skeletons wers there, as if waiting for mc, knew about him already. Also. Mc is a level 3 and could kill 15 skeletons at level 15-20 in 1 hit. Are you serious?. Then mc gets an explosion to his face. Loses nearly half his body. Bones showing and be is nonchalant about it. As if getting recieving a grenade explosion in his face is not an issue.... also... the undeads did not surround him when they found him. Plus they somehow LOST THEM despite being 15 undeads who can run without getting tired and extremely fast.... when i read this i was... are you f serious?
That's really nice comment :) You brought good points :D Maybe you'll return to this story to bring more wisdom in the future lol Thanks for trying it out ^^
Psan:you can explain those so that it dosnt seem forced for just plot. for example. have the skeletons mention how lucky they are to find an otherworlder newbie. also The foxgirl seem to be mentally unstable but if thats your intentionm its very good, since she is missing memories. second.. the stiry would be more interesting if the mc was a regular guy that uses his head and wits to become stronger and survive. i say this because as you said. mc defeated all skeletons not because he outsmarted them. ambushed them or something else. but he was simple OP from the very start. meaning. mc could only win due to his so called peak of humanity body. this lowers your character score so to speak. anybody with half their body missing would be in a state of shock if not dead. it would have been a lot better if Louise Risked it all to save mc by killing the skeleton mage with her life in the line to get mc to level up and save him. this is way better than mc just shrugging his deadly injuries. chat for a while and then kill the skeleton who no longer resist. its an undead, if he is out of magic fist weapons will do. if not hands, if not he will try to bite you to dead... but the skeleton simple gave up, talk cursed mc and gave up resistance.
