Comments of chapter undefined of One Piece: The Unreal Adventure
One Piece: The Unreal Adventure
Fallen_Crown
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Author I mean no offense. But what makes original luffy so good are his gears. The fact that despite knowing how cruel thw world is and he doesnt know what gears are and he still hasn't learned them makes me question his intelligence. Sure he uses a weapon and marine powers. But he feels like complete different character. And you should have gone for a original one instead by just giving him a different devil fruit instead. Because as of this point the rubber fruit is wasted on him. And with the powers he has in no way is he up to doffy level. Marine 6 powers are strong but without haki you can't cross that threshold. Bur again it's your novel I am just stating my opinion.
Your killing too many named characters while in real one piece Luffy didnât kill,even If he could.....I wanted all those techniques I suggested.....but I donât want people like Kuro,Arlong,Choo,Krieg,Nezumi etc.to die but you could have just handed them over to Smoker in logue town....Also your showing off too much in East Blue and Aramaki is too much and too early in the story plus too many OC's as well as power difference or difference in ability.....Also the real reason is I lost intetest in the fic after reading One Piece Dream of Immortality....while the fic is making me anxious that FMC will get too strong/Unkillable(Cause of Healing Factor) during the Post-TimeSkip but otherwise I love It,meaning everything about that fic while I liked the beginning of this story but gradually I'm losing interest,Sorry about that Author-nim,but You should keep continuing maybe I'll like It again in the future.
