Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn in Twilight as a Werebear
Reborn in Twilight as a Werebear
Anomander_Adaar
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Lamentable.... Su cara se pone roja porque el tambien quiere abrazarla............. Decepcionante. Que él quiere estar con Alice 24/7, los 7 dias de la semana, lo dice luego de una conversación que tuvo con ella haha.... , demasiado exagerado y subdesarrollado, que pesimo de verdad. Aqui la dejo mejor antes de renegar mas de este cuento de un amor super "romántico"...
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Anomander_Adaar
A few things that make no sens: 1. He had a vision. You described it as a vision. Is that a power humans in that world have or would be shapeshifters? Seems random and unneeded just for one sentence. 2. Shapeshifter=Trouble controlling instincts (at first), immortal (if they change often), strong, can change form at will, quickly and easily. They do NOT pass out for an entire night only to find their body walked on its own and killed a moose or anything. That is werewolves, this world has werewolves. At best you can say he passed out of the pain of first transformation, even though this is more magic transformation and less physical (ie bones changing and more like liquid changing). 3. Vampires smell like meat? old meat? They are made of glowing rocks. Canon did say they smell strongly to shapeshifters, not terrible, just strong and unique. You went with they smell like old meat. So his girlfriend needs perfume now or do ALL vampires smell like meat EXCEPT his "mate", that would be an exaggerated coincidence. 4. Physical changes. I assume you did it on purpose on the second day so someone would notice. It could have been a day before just by smelling the Vs around town. Not all the wolves met the Vs first, they just transformed for sensing them near their area.
