Comments of chapter undefined of The Boys: Reborn as Soldier Boy
The Boys: Reborn as Soldier Boy
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This was so disappointing in so many different ways. You have the first original character you create humiliate the protagonist. On top of that, he only survived because of another character we know very little of. I simply don't understand why authors focused on fanfictions try to implement original aspects to their stories when they are incapable of doing so. I understand trying to bring innovation and new aspects to the plot, but this is not it. You have the protagonist face against a character no one knows because we have no pre-established knowledge of such character. In contrast to the protagonist, who we know is of the most powerful characters in the known verse. This is his first encounter outside of what we have already seen in the series and you have him lose in a way that is simply disappointing. I recomend building up the original antagonists of the story through different methods. That is usually not needed in fanfiction because we already know the capabilities of most characters. The most simple ways you can build up the antagonist is through recognition of other pre-established characters or through actions that make your character truly threatening and powerful. What this event comes out to look like is your protagonist loosing against a child with augmentations. Who we are told has some powers because its father was a scientist involved in the experimentations of Soldier Boy. How he managed to cram these specific powers into it? We are neither told nor shown. Just how capable is this thing? We, again, don't know. All it did was kill its already dying father and trash the protagonist. Which in turn makes the protagonist look incompetent and weak. This is my only complain on the story so far. Which brings some apprehension to the other original aspect of the story. And this one is much more important because it's the foundation to your whole work.
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