Comments of chapter undefined of Villainous Young Master's Otherworldly Harem
Villainous Young Master's Otherworldly Harem
starry8sword
Chapter comments19
Um can you make the MC like have martial arts he cant just like always count on the villains to save him hes just gonna die if a protagonist with big background order an assassination attempt on him
Author, I have a question to see if you can answer it, I've read up to this chapter nothing more but I'm left with the doubt that he finally stays with Li Yuling. Mainly I prefer that with the MC but I don't understand you for going through the tug of war if you're going to give it to someone and that's over. If it's Wang Ming, I don't see why he should continue to increase favorability with the MC and if it's in the MC, I don't see why you need to keep bringing Wang Ming in because it's stressful. For example, you are chasing a girl and suddenly you see her kissing or hugging another. Please tell me to see if it motivates me to continue reading. And no, I can't stand MCs who give girls away to others and walk around on mats, I prefer selfish MCs.
starry8sword:Let's wait for future chapter. Well, Read the first line of my synopsis and you might get a spoiler :)
Use single quotes for internal dialogs and also make smoother transition when changing scenes. Either put there some kind of divider like "..." or let us know that the scene changed, like: While person A was at home doing something MC was walking on street thinking about his next plan. Usually you just skip to next scene which is confusing. Like that time when Zi continued with her novel that was followed by MC's internal monolog. First I thought it's her talking which made no sense before I realized that the scenes changed. It's breaking the flowđ and use the doble quote for dialogs(" ") and single quotes for internal dialogs(' ') or italics if you don't like single quotes. Otherwise it's again breaking the flow because readers have to take some time to realize if he's continuing dialog or if he's talking to himselfđ There's still around 100 chapters more, so maybe this has already changed, but if not it really should be changed.
