Emmanuel_Capricorn
Thanks for the effort put into these series of chapters. It's nice so far. Though I'll admit, something... something I can't quite put my finger on, is making very upset with this whole fight scene. The whole scene makes me go, "It's nice and all, but no". Again, not sure what it is exactly that makes me dislike the scene but that's the truth of the matter. Not much of a constructive criticism I know, but it's something I felt I had to share.