Comments of chapter undefined of One Piece: Dream of Immortality
One Piece: Dream of Immortality
ScarletArboretum
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You seem to have lost that creative spark you had before she met straw hats. Now the story is just a repeat of someone else's story with added spice, instead of something more interesting and creative. It is a shame. I hoped she would leave for a different island when they reached Arabasta. You could delete the chapters after she met them and change them so she doesn't join them and start from that point again.
She is behaving like strawhats who bet their lives on great luck... i want her to be like rayleigh who is calm, cool, and calculative....
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ScarletArboretum
Since meeting the straw hats the story has changed from a series of original fun adventures of a witty girl with her own experiences and takes on things... to the scrambling of a mob character that only survives based on the random whim of another mob character as you summarize events that are going on in the story rather than actually showing us them because we already know what happens. Any time you feel the need to just summarize huge events, that means you should probably change things up and just leave them behind.
