Comments of chapter undefined of Pokémon world journey

hey author! i hohe you have fun writing this Story! I will certainly give it a Chance. The Premise is Standard but enjoyable, but I thought I would point out a few Things I noticed. 1. this reads a little like an Essay right now so thats a point to improve in the future. i am unfortunately Not an Expert of writing but i am Sure you could find some General Tips online. 2. Language. This point should eliminate itself with time and effort. I hope this feedback helps even if it comes from an amateur. cheers!