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Comments of chapter undefined of Taking Part in a Survival Game with My Brother

Ms_Sha
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I'm very surprised that they have Epilogue here!

nadz_4life
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believe it could have been a better story if it was edited properly (the chapters with the variety show was better edited) To be honest the story started very well, even though sometimes they mixed up the genders; it's not a big deal, my brain auto corrects it. These are the problems I have encountered: Chapters repeated constantly, paragraphs also repeated ( if a chapter should consist of 1000 words;500 is repeated), 5 chapters ( 214-218) consists of an entirely different book. Another thing that happened a lot is scene jumping; for instance, in the midst of conversations between characters (eg: in the hospital) , the scene will automatically jump to one of the characters in another setting( eg: at home, grandmother's place, or the airport) either doing random things or conversing with someone else, this is a constant occurrence, the conversation with characters are stagnant, and worst of all it's with the main leads. If the Author gets the novel, re-edited, a 5🌟 will be given ( I rarely write reviews, but I have to be honest)