Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn in Modern Family

Great chapter so far. Some advice Is your telling us unnecessary information. It’s like your giving us a list on every single thing he did. You should try show us how certain characters are feeling instead of outright telling us. When you mentioned that he was bored in classes instead you could have gone alongst the lines of “Droning out the voice of the teacher, I looked out the window and released a sigh, class was a lot more boring without Haley”. It makes the characters feel a lot more real. Small things like these will make the story go along way. The “show don’t tell” writing technique will make the quality improve a lot. Sorry if I sound like a pretentious a** but I just wanted to give some advice. Anyways great story so far and I look forward to future chapters

hey man just do what you want to do if you make plot holes all well, and just move on nothing is perfect in the world.

Good so far . I really like Haley but have you seen Alex ? She has grown into such a sexy woman...

I'm lovin 'it!!! 🥰🥰🥰🥰🤩🤩🤩

thx!! don't listen to the haters, you're doing a great job!! ^^

short.. but still nice.

Liking it so far keep it up!

He told her come here

Great chapter

Thxs for the chap

it feels like you're over explaining everything he does and his reasons overly. for example the moment when he asked haleys number it was pretty cringe.

Good

nice

tftc~~~○●