Comments of chapter undefined of I am in a new world, playing an offline RPG game

I really like this novel bit the writing and storytelling need a lot of work

nice book but you use 'well' a little bit too often

Writing style needs abit of work and story too I mean if mc takes out gold from his game and convert that into currency income tax department will question him where it came from in any country thats why its abit naive so you need to get a better idea on how and why the mc got rich.

mc is f**ked

a verb is an action a noun performs. She(noun) screamed(verb). works... however she(noun) scream(noun). doesn't work... I will say though, the structure of most of the sentences here, don't mesh too well together. The flow is constantly interrupted and difficult to immerse oneself into. So the author does have a lot to work on.