it is great how you show the nerve wraking position slanesh put normal eldar in. to where just expressing her depression at her standing in the world is deadly. that is a tid bit in stories easily over looked.
I'm hoping that he goes for body path with a bit of soul protection, while for the rest I'd like to see the Eldar in awe at the stuff he's pulling out and for their relationship to grow more intimate.
I'm enjoying the novel but I've gotta say the worst part is his internal questioning of his cultivation path, it's just rambling for ages and he doesn't seem to do any real cultivation.
the 40K stuff is grand overall, not much to criticize there.