Comments of chapter undefined of That Unique Monster Who Just Got the 'Consciousness' Passive Skill
skipped. I never have and will care about the "past". It's annoying to read about something that has happened but is not about MC BEFORE MC is introduced. Like I just don't care, First I need to care about MC before I can start caring about what happened to him/how he came to be etc. IMO prologue su4ked ballzz. (not that i read much of it)
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Keeptheball
Hey Author, your story seems really interesting. Just a critique -- some sentences are a bit difficult to understand. It's mainly because they are either written in passive voice, the object of the sentence is misplaced or they're too long. For example, instead of: "Because still all very much panicked, he abruptly stood up, bent his back, slamming both hands on the table", you could have written: "Amidst his immense panic, he abruptly stood up, bent his back and slammed both his hands onto the table". The long-windedness of the sentences are probably the main issue. Cut them down and it'll be easier to understand. The story seems really interesting, but please try editing this when you can. It will make the story far more appealing.
