Comments of chapter undefined of In Game Of Thrones World with LOTR system
In Game Of Thrones World with LOTR system
Just_for_fun1997
Chapter comments13
Bro this story seems more like summary. I don't know which readers ticked you off in previous fic by saying that story is too slow but this fast pace is bad for your book. Right now I'm only attracted to this book because it's blend of LOTR and GOT but as soon as this attraction wears off, there will be nothing left to make me wanna stay and read more. You have to find a line in-between. Make the story more detailed but only where the interesting part comes. Then skip day to day boring stuff. Put some more depth to characters. Take a chapter or two to introduce people who are relevant to story. Give some depth. Show us what kind of person MC is. Why he does certain things. Give him a drive. My point is, give the story a realistic prospective. Think how a character will act how in what situation. And for that you will have to give them some depth. There's a marvel fanfic called Gacha Essence on Webnovel. The author of this story did a good job establishing MC's personality. Read it to take some idea. Try it, although it won't be easy but you could find your writing style through this. Hope this helps.
Become a KOL for my discussion channel!
Engage with others on the app, and become a moderator for my discussion channel. Let this be a place for sharing with other fellow bookworms!
Just_for_fun1997
MC true appearance will no doubt make all men and women enchanted and fall for him if the author decide to make the MC half Maiar and half Elf. Also I'm gonna wait for MC to summon Galadriel, Gandalf and Saruman. It'll be really cool if you let Gandalf wander, roam around and establish his reputation as Gandalf the Grey after the fall of Valyria. We'll go to see these characters interact with the characters in GoT then.
