Dreizehnn
You're doing a fairly good job bro! Those negative comments, y'know there is a whole lot of stupid people in web novel or just they comment without thinking! You fic has it flaws but it is good compared to others out there that qre "top"... u has to realize that people here aren't that good critics., if you pay attention re-reading your fic and a few comments I had read, you can improve your writtings skills a level further! Remember, everyone has their tastes, for example, mine is Amou... She's just a great character hahahs and female lead, if you make a fic of her and mc being power couple traversing multiverse like " reincarnation paradise" it has a looooot potential!!
I couldn't care less about main world setting tbh. It's overcomplicated and oversaturated with amount of crossovers. Out of all "thug life"/street gangs genre manga, only "Crows" and "Worst" made sense to me, mostly cause they were grounded and pretty realistic. But, eh, I never understood the obsession with "homeworld" in Chat Group fics. I mean, there is literal omniverse to explore, but nah, let's just sit home.
I mean, sure I get that Yakuza make for an interesting genre, but I'm really unfamiliar with it. From this chapter, I'm just getting the impression that there's some small fry coalition going to happen, which isn't really interesting when you have magic and the multiverse to explore. I'm not sure why quests and chat aren't a focus, isn't that the genre of this fic? Dimensional group chat hello? Tho the premise is still interesting. Hoping to see kakegurui characters soon lol.