Comments of chapter undefined of Rise Online: Return of the Legendary Player
Rise Online: Return of the Legendary Player
NandoFalske
Chapter comments12
The premise of the story is very good but 36 chapters only covering 2 days of content makes reading the story feel extremly tedious. Also, the grammar just makes zero sense in a lot of parts (especially the dialogue) and completely ruins any sort of character interaction that happens. If the grammar and pacing get fixed then the outcome would be a top-tier novel my friend.
So far I see nothing special to spend on your book Mr writer. 1st after 36 chapters the story hasn't progressed, the Mc just plays the game for the sake of playing, he has no appealing qualities. the world background is nonexistent, so far I saw no drive or ambition of the Mc. all in all nice book but at this stage it's not worth my coins sorry nothing has or is attracting me to spend on this sorry
