Comments of chapter undefined of The shadow of dead.
The shadow of dead.
Surbhi_mithil
Chapter comments20
The cover of this book is quite captivating from the image and title. Reading through the first page, I love your word play, sounded so elegant. I like the dialogue But, there seem to be a lot of typos and merged words which is understandable, no one is perfect Try using Grammarly it's a keyboard app to help with typos secondly, for the first chapter I didn't really get a full picture and was mostly confused. You didn't write out the setting, eg, where are the characters location ? what are they doing ? are they at a diner, or room, or shop, restaurant or a park? The number of people kept confusing me. There was little to no action eg, like when they left to enter a cab, you didn't describe much of thei journey or what they did when they got there. I suggest you review study some other novels to understand how to describe a story alongside te dialogue. I hope this review doesn't offend you and you take it as a way to encourage you to improve yourself . Your writing is good, you just need more training and practices . But the storyline seems intriguing
