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Comments of chapter undefined of The Archives Of A Summoner

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lurkingreader
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Maybe it’s because you’re writing in first person but there’s a lot of telling rather than showing. It makes the prologue feel a bit bland to read through. My suggestion would be to describe MC’s actions and surroundings on a typical day while weaving the background information into his thoughts. Not sure I’ll get far enough for a review so just going to leave this as a comment here.