Comments of chapter undefined of Gamer in Overlord
Gamer in Overlord
Student_Of_Culture
Chapter comments46
hi bro, I read your fanfiction (overlord) my observation of your characters the MC is did not move on of his past life and also the beginning of the chapter and to the end feels rush, there's a lot potential when the nc reincarnate in the beginning of the release of the game lock of foundation being overpower too much i understand that the unknown world has potential to kill however in writing the story is need more understanding what his action or the mc should do in particular circumstances of future events why reading of sakura chapter defeating the opponents one shot or three shot damage to the opponent is quiet doll you mention that the mc don't wants to be too much overpower in playing the game and fighting and going to quest have ever you make the mc so much op one shot and did not enjoy the bottle you should show how all his hard work to accomplish the bottle and strategy in fighting however you just make a character or mc is immature cannot move on insecure the power balance not separate from the game and to the reality this is my opinion or perspective why reading of your fanfic i hope you improve as a writer this is one step what is lacking as a writer, i hope it helps you
